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youth crime essay

youth crime essay
This is the next in my series of sample IELTS essay lessons. The idea is that I don’t just give you
an essay, I talk to you about how to write it. In this lesson, I show you a youth crime essay and
focus on how to get the right vocabulary.

Thinking about functional and not just topic vocabulary
There is a skill in reading IELTS essay questions. One step is to see that you need to use
particular vocabulary to write the essay. The next step is to see that not all the vocabulary you
need is topic vocabulary. That is what this lesson is really about – a large part of the vocabulary
you need in your essays is not about the topic of the essay itself.

Read and understand the question – finding the vocabulary
you need
You should see that as you read this youth crime essay question that it does not simply ask you
about crime and young people, it also asks you about: causes, solutions,
explanations and suggestions . These are the areas where a good range of functional
vocabulary will help you.

In recent years, there has been a considerable rise in crimes committed by young people in
cities.
What has caused this? What solutions can you suggest?


Topic vocabulary
One obvious area is topic vocabulary. Here we have:


crime



young people



cities

More functional vocabulary
What other language do you need? Sometimes it can be easy to forget this part.


Problem/solution vocabulary: the question asks you to discuss a problem.



Cause and effect vocabulary: you need to think about why it is happening



Explanation vocabulary: you are asked to explain something.



Suggestion vocabulary: again, you are asked to make suggestions.


The big idea – vary the vocabulary you use
Once you have identified what types of vocabulary you need, the next step is to understand that
you want to vary the language you use. That much is clear. It is worth understanding that there
are different ways to do this:

1. Changing the word itself

One obvious thing to do is just change the word you use. For example, all these words are
related and can be used to discuss causes:


cause



effect



result



reason



lead to

2. Varying your word combinations
A slightly different idea is to keep the main word, but change the words you use with it. This
can be a sensible approach as keeping the same word is good for cohesion, while changing the
combinations helps show off your range of vocab. For example, all these phrases use “problem”
in different ways:


a pressing problem



an urgent problem



deal with a problem



a problematic situation

Look at my IELTS youth crime essay and see how I use this vocabulary
When I say “look at”, I really mean look. I have highlighted the different functional language in
different colours. You should see these words are a huge part of the essay:

Close Me
The rise of crime among young people is an urgent problem in many cities that needs to be
addressed. However, in order to find a solution , it is first of all necessary to understand
what has led to this happening. In this essay, I first of all examine the reasons for the rise
in youth crime, then I suggest how this problem may be resolved .
Perhaps the principal cause of this rise in youth crime is the increased use of drugs and
alcohol among young people. Many cities suffer from the phenomenon of binge drinking by


teenagers who lose control under the influence of alcohol and commit crimes. For instance, it is
a common sight on the streets of Britain to see fights breaking out outside pubs and clubs.
Similarly, there is a clear connection between drug abuse among the young and crime. It is
still unfortunately the case that young people frequently see drugs as cool and become
addicted. It is a common occurrence for these addicts to resort to petty theft in order to pay
for their habit.
There are a variety of potential ways of combatting this problem . One possibility
that is sometimes suggested is a much stricter system of penalties and punishments to
deter young people from a life of crime. That might work, but it would also be sensible
to improve the system of education so that young people were better informed about the
dangers of drugs and alcohol. This should have the effect of dealing with the
issues that cause youth crime in the first place.
In conclusion, alcohol and drug abuse are among the primary reasons for the rise in young
offenders and if the authorities wish to tackle youth crime, one approach would be to
educate the young more effectively.
Notes on vocabulary

Problem/solution
an urgent problem… to be addressed
find a solution
how this problem may be resolved
combatting this problem
dealing with the issues
to tackle youth crime

Cause and effect
has led to
the primary reasons for
the reasons for
the principal cause of


a clear connection between
have the effect of
issues that cause youth crime
the primary reasons for

Explanation
examine the reasons
Perhaps

Suggestions
then I suggest how
There are a variety of potential ways of
One possibility that is sometimes suggested is
it would also be sensible to

“Crime” words
I haven’t highlighted these in the essay, but you might want to look at:

fights breaking out
binge drinking (not a crime really)
petty theft
life of crime
drug abuse
addicted
their habit


Download the essay
IELTS youth crime essay (1635)

An exercise and different ideas for the essay
There are of course different approaches to this essay. I decided to focus on the link between
crime and young people’s use of drugs and alcohol. Two other ideas I didn’t include were


poverty – does poverty lead to crime



families – should families be more responsible in the way they bring up children
The exercise is just to write one paragraph about what causes crime among young people and
to try and use a variety of the cause and effect language in my essay. It sometimes help to focus
on one thing at a time, so you need not write the whole essay.



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